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C ﻿hristopher George Latore Wallace known as Biggie Smalls was born May 21, 1972 at St. Mary`s Hospital. When he was 12 he started selling drugs. He also excelled in class and his mom worked two jobs to suppourt her and Wallace. He also went to school with J-zay Busta Rymes. Biggie droped out of school at 17 and again started selling drugs and then got sentenced to 5 years probation. Later he got arrested on violation of probation.

Smalls was arrested a year later in North Carolina for dealing Crack and cocaine and spent 9 years in jail until bail. Biggie rapped as a teenager and that was a entertainment to people on the streets. When he got out of jail he made a demo tape and he was 6`3 at 300 to 380 pounds.

There was beef on the streets with Biggie and 2-pac when 2-pac got shot 6 days later he died from wounds on September 7 1996. When tupac died people thought Biggie did that and there were songs dissing each other.

Biggie influenced rap music by having fans and people wannaing to be rappers. Also he rapped about his life and other rappers started to do the same. I know he was a influencer because when he was killed there were a lot of people there and there are people today who still listen to him like me..... !

Good start X. You could certainly add some here about !how Biggie's music influenced rap music.

Good work X- you have a nice start here. I'm interested to hear the story.

It was a cool summer day. It was my liitle cousins b-day. A week before we plan where we would go. We all pick Frick park and every one was excitied to go I had to help that sucked. I thought that day would suck but it turned out to be a good day. I think you could work a little more here at getting the attention of the reader.

The night before we had got chips,ice cream, and drinks. His favorite hero was batman like me so I thought I should get him a batman toy and he would love it. Also they wanted me to keep him up all night and play with him so in the morning he would sleep till like 12 (he's turning four) it was hard to do boy. Can you describe this a little more. You say in this paragraph that you are supposed to keep your cousin awake, but then you say in the next paragraph that you can't get him to go to sleep. I think I know what you mean, but you could describe this more.

That night he wouldnt go to sleep wow im thinking. Then I started to wrestle with him and I was trying to hit him in pionts to make him sleep. The only problem was I had to help in the morning so if we stayed up all night then it would suck for me. Again, you could use more description here about what it means to hit him in points to make him go to sleep. More description throughout your story would help.

I fainlly got him to sleep 1:30! You would think he would go to sleep earilier but no all night. So I went to the fridge got something to eat umm took some chips, ice cream you no juice. Than went back to sleep.

We got up went to the park and started to set up around 9:30 am and I was still a sleep. It took like 25 min just to get the stuff in the car so we didnt get up there till like 10:05 06. The next thing that was a big whop was they made me carry all the stuff from the car to the little set up part and I had to. So then its like 10:30 time was running.

The next thing we did was find the little cord and hook up the music thing. Next, we put the cups,forks, and paper plates on a table with sodas and stuff. Then, we put the food on a table, games on a table, and snacks on one. There was like six tables and all of them were full. We got done at about 11:30 and it was time for people to come.

Every one came and were having agood time fainlly i got to sit own and rest. The minute I closed my eyes my little cousin was running over to me and gave me a hug. I sat back thinking I helped with this that was the best part (other than playing football).

Again. Good story. I think you could use more description throughout the narrative and some editing to make sure what you are saying makes sense.

I think this will be one of the best movie of batman. First Batman is my favorite Hero out of all of them. All the movies the have made I liked them all no matter where it was at. Also I live in Pittsburgh so if its here im going to try to go check it out. This is great because Im a huge fan and maybe I could see hoe the suit looks in person i cant wait.

X- You are doing a really nice job with your Wiki. I graded your stuff and you are doing fine. Keep up the good work. Your persuasive paper shows good organization. Check out my notes about your thesis.

Good start on the first day of work. You are a good writer. Keep working hard.

4) Im am going to tell you who will win the super bowl next year. All of the teams are good but some better then others. I think the Redskins will when the super bowl next year because they can bounce back and and go all the way. Here, your paper could benefit from a strong thesis: The Redskins are the best team in football because they can beat the best teams, they can overcome a tough schedule, they can sneak up on teams. Does this make sense?

The first reason why I think they are gonna win the super bowl is they beat the team last year who won the super bowl. Also since they weren't that good they get to pick a low draft pick and can get some one good like a QB WR or some one on defenise. There team is team wasn't that bad last year but they still stunck.

The secound reason why I think they will win is they may suck but there better ten some other teams. Also there are teams better then them like the Pittsburgh Steelers that's a good team matter fact a great team. The Redskins would also have to face the super bowl winners the Packers and the Eagles. Redskins got a tough shculed but they can over come.

The last reason is people will be thinking they are gonna suck and then play lite on them and lose. Also any year can be any teams year and it's gonna be the Washington ﻿Redskins year. The Redskins last won in like 1987 when they had Dough Williams They are a good team they just start to slack to much. This is why I think the Redskins will win the super bowl.

Those are all of the reasons why the Redskins will win the super bowl. There reping my home town here we go Redskins here we go. P.S IF if we dont win we wil win next year.

3)Im going to teach you how to play basketball better. First you have to practice and practice etc. Next you should work on bing able to dribble with both hands so you could put a hand behind your back and dribble with that hand for a while. Then shoot around and find a spot where you usaully make it. Dont be scared to play when you see people play ask to play and they might let you and show them what you can do. Dont forget always PRACTICE no matter how good you are.

2) My house has a golden wooded floor. The walls are green but me and my mom are going to change it. We have a basement, downstairs, and up stairs. I have like 20 steps and the upstairs the walls are white, and my sisters old room is pink, and the room in the back is brown. My living room has two chairs a big red chair and medium size yellow chair. It also has this couach that can turn into a bed. We have a dinning room with a big table and like 4 chairs around it. My kitchen has a frige and all the regular stuff. The walls in there are green to, my grandma painted the whole (i helped a little) house. I have three dogs named Bonnie J.R and Lady.

1)MIllted Creigh was a good preson because he told people what they had to do to get where they wanted to be. Also he talked to people about what it is realy like if you do drugs and where you can end up. Millted creigh also came and seen most of the same points of veiw so he could realite to the kids. He got in a tone so they new that when ever he talked you listened. The kids started to like him and then more people would listen and probly started to try to do better and want for more in life then little stuff.

This stuff effects WMS student because alot of kids do drugs and get in to trouble. WMS students(some of them) dont care about nothing they do and how they act. He told kids what type of trouble you would get in for acting up. Thats why I think he was a good person to talk to us.

Good job X, I like listening to "Big Milt" as well. You gave some great supporting details here. I think your paragraph could improve if you provide some explanation and more connection to how these traits "motivated" or "inspired" WMS students. Also, take a quick look at this and edit it before you submit it for final grading. See if you notice any changes that you should make.

Great work in class. Keep it up.